Thursday, January 28, 2010

Mumbai Locals anyone??

7:57 ST, 7:43 PL
first three compartment ladies or a whole Ladies special

Overflowing locals
Little kids reaching handles

Jalad local
Dheemi local

Check-your-weight-for-5-bucks machines
Handicapped compartment with silent movies

Fragrant fisher women
Hurried home-work completion

Huge lugguage compartments
Windows show sketchy apartments

Stylish women with laptops
Bollywood music or hiphop

Innocent hands with comics
Sales calls on naive lips

Glaring women with stepped-on sarees
Lone policeman for scenes with scaries

Incredibly incomprehensible announcements for incredibly fast trains
Almost-everything-sells-here agents for harbour-line slow trains

Work-from-home-starting-salary-15000! ads
Diversified jaats in Matrimonial ads

Sleepy heads on compartment walls
Sale hangars with smiley balls

Departure enquiry from fellow companion
Reserving seats to avoid exhaustion

Artificial jewelery that comes cheap
Soggy palak that lies in a heap

Women busy with crochet or knitting
Others fighting or teeth gritting

Medical students with fat books
Engineering students with math looks!

Teenage girls with high-pitched chatter
Quiet aunties who've felt better

Later hours are not so loud
Dying down with thinning crowds

Empty trains with lights shut-out
Last run for its night-out

9 comments:

  1. wow... i like this post! :) a typical scenario of of what i call THE LADIES compartment.

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  2. :) :) zank u..! started out with a few words..(like the goa post)..and then tried my hand at rhyming it ;)

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  3. I LOVE THIS!!!!!! :D
    Loved so many things about it...u've mentioned things that I would have easily overlooked and selected words to describe things so beautifully...not focussed just on the fact that they should rhyme...the fact that they rhymed gave them a nice touch though! :)
    LOVED IT!!!!!! Keep it up! HUGS!!!! :D

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  4. !! :) :) i can actually hear u saying it priti! thank u so much!!!

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  5. quite a description of mumbai's lifeline!!

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  6. Mumbai local trains is one of my favourite topic...it is amazing to see how even diverse things co-exist in perfect symphony.

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